这句英文翻译有错吗？若有，请指出

Question

当时，这艘轮船不仅是造船史上建造的最大的一艘船，而且也被认为是不会沉没的。因为船由16个密封舱组成，即使有两个舱进水，仍可漂浮的水面上。然而，这艘巨轮首航就下沉，造成大批人员死亡。人们将永远记着这艘巨轮的沉没惨剧。
The ship not only the biggest in history of making ship, but also it was considered that did not submerged. Because the ship was made from sixteen closed rooms, even two were broken, the ship keep well. However, the large ship sinked by first sailing, whichled many people death. The event of the large ship sinking was remembered by people forever

这句英文翻译有错吗？若有，请指出 错在哪 ？原因是什么？ 我想知道原因。
注意 原版翻译我有，但这里不需要，请大虾就这句话进行分析。谢谢

Answer 1

你翻译的东西，且不说好不好，语法问题太多了，要说估计要几百字，还未必说的完。

语法错误充斥着整个翻译，并且有些意思表达严重错误。比如 history of making ship

it was considered that did not submerged. 一个句子两个动词，不知所云。。

Because the ship was made from sixteen closed rooms。 made from 不是这么用的。。

keep well 是用来形容人的。

However, the large ship sinked by first sailing, whichled many people death.

这句后面many people death 完全错误，错的离谱

还有很多的其他的错误，真的太多了。。。

Answer 2

''but also''加入去有点怪怪的,而且that後面会是一句完整句子。所以要是我,我会把那句写成: ...it was also considered as unsinkable.

是''made of''不是''made from''，
make...from

表示由...制成, 用...制成, 指原料加工後的东西在形态和性质上发生了本质的变化, 即化学变化, 也可用於被动语态 be made from。

make...of

表示由...制成, 用...制成, 指原料加工後的东西在本质和形态上未发生变化, 指产生物理变化, 也可用於被动语态 be made of。

''the ship can still be able to float''好像比较符合句子文意。

''(Titanic) the large ship sinked on its first voyage, which led many people to death.''

''The sinking of this ship would never be forgotten.'' seems to be better.

Answer 3

At the time, however, she was not only the largest ship that had ever been built, but was regarded as unsinkable, for she had sixteen watertight compartments. Even if two of these were flooded, she would still be able to float. The tragic sinking of this great liner will always be remembered, for she went down on her first voyage with heavy loss of life.
还是原文精练，准确，地道。在有标准答案的情况下，不需要对照汉语译文再翻译回英文去。这叫折腾。

Answer 4

咱们一句一句说吧：
The ship not only the biggest in history of making ship这句话无谓语动词，就像是我们说“你吃饭了吗？”说成了“你饭了吗”一样
应在the ship 和 not 之间加 was.

Answer 5

这个句子很好，只是翻译不要字字对照。尽量摆脱中式英语。希望对你有帮助。

Answer 6

that time, the ship is not only the construction of the largest shipbuilding history of a ship, and is also considered unsinkable. Because the ship is composed of 16 sealed compartments, even if two of these were flooded, she would still be able to float. However, the ship went down on her first voyage, resulting in a large number of deaths. People will always remember the tragedy.
应该是这样