我发现这句英文错了,如果我要修改,该怎么修改英文

Question

charming as you are when you were giving me amorous looks.

这句英文错了,如果我要修改,该怎么修改??请大家帮帮忙.
charming as you are when you gave me amorous looks.
你的意思这样改??

Answer 1

把were giving改成gave你看中不？

追问

你觉得这样就行了吗??有没更好的??这句你是怎么翻译呢???

追答

当你向我展露那多情的外表时是多么的迷人。
怪怪的，，，不确定了又。。

追问

你帮我从新造个我们口语爱说的类似的句子.这个是书上的,不口语.先谢谢咯,

追答

When the first time I saw you, I just fell in love with you...