第一句话应改用现在时,Everyone has a childhood and so do I. 后面连着的三句话都不对,建议改为:I spent my childhood with my grandparents in a small village. 下面一句改为:They were my friends and very important to me. 接下来的到第一段结束没问题。 第二段中最后两句话合并为一句:I loved blue because it was like the color of my grandmother’s clothes.
第三段中,was able to 改为 could。He got me a best wish 改为He taught me, “ Actions speak louder than words. “
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